Wednesday, June 10, 2009

Are you listening to every word that I'm singing?

I wanted to write a book, but as I was thinking of some complicated and depressing plotline, I only came up with the saddest ending. Please take note of the diction, syntax and theme. I'd appreciate that greatly. Haha.

Adrian dragged his feet along the dark grey gravel. He hung his head like a suicidal man's from a rope. His eyes were red; anyone could see the pulsating veins of blood that all led to the sunless pupils. His lips were numb from trembling and chapped with craters from the cold. His face, which had been so lively and chipper only a few months ago, was now creased with the inevitable deep lines of agony and heartbreak. His muscles screamed mercy and his feet, which have been drained of all energy from pacing to and fro, were blistered - tortured.

As he rounded the corner of the town square, Adrian caught a glimpse of blonde somewhere in the distance - a blonde he has only ever seen in the hair of one. Confused, he pushed and shoved desperately through the crowd and focused his eyes on what he realized to be Paige. In that instant, shocks of adulation were sent down his spine and through his nerves. When she vanished without an explanation three months ago, she had left Adrian in a puddle of bewilderment and humiliation, turning his world into dusky mayhem. However, upon seeing the sparkle of her gleaming iridescent eyes and the shine in her angelic smile, he ran. He dug through the chaos. It wasn't going to happen this time; he wasn't going to let her leave again. He thrashed and thrashed and thrashed through the throngs of people, keeping his weary eyes on the one color he could see in his life. And as he was just about close enough to hear Paige's voice, he felt the current of the giant mass driving him back. Hopelessly, Adrian cried her name out over the sounds of the horde. Sure enough, Paige twirled around to lay her eyes directly on his. As if she had been expecting to see him, her lips formed into a simple "hi" and turned upwards to unfold a delicate smile. But in that single moment, waves of people washed him back, and as most beloved ones have done in his life, she disappeared. And Adrian was left in the middle of perplexing chaos - tortured.

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